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[Ytown Public 2]

Some honest critique...

Marcus,
First off let me say that I think you have alot of talent and I love your artwork. You have a real knack for directing the scenes and the voice acting (tho low grade sound quality) is done very nicely.
I noticed a few things that would make this series better tho.
#1. and most importantly..THE SOUND. I know it cost money for a decent mic, and sometimes its still hard to get a decent sound, but this is really the first thing you should do. A clean sound can make all the difference in the world to lazy scrubs who cant make out the sounds, but are too lazy to read..heh. If you need any tips, or any voice overs for any parts, or any software to help with the final mix, let me know.
#2. The characters arent real defined. I know its just starting out and all, but I feel you need to give the characters more personality. Maybe you should add a few characters as well, and give motives behind the characters actions...such as why does the Principal hate kids so much, etc.
#3. I can tell you did a better job on the story board this time, good job. I think you need to try to put a little more humor in the series and make the stories a bit more solid.
Good luck on part 3, and I have some ideas for stories if you need any help, or want a few ideas, just let me know.
PBM
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McRhyme responds:

You think I should add depth to the character? Hello? Flash toons are totally 2D. This comment will make a brilliant joke in one episode. A see a man explaining the laws of physics in the cartoon world. Haha. More humor you say, well I add as much as I ever can. I aim to have 10 jokes a minute. Haha.

You will probalby be mentioned in the next episode, one way or another.

[Ballad of a fallen angel]

This was deep...

Thats a really moving song. I think the feeling with the white and greys you used conveyed a form of depression and sadness. The music went right along with the flow. Almost as if there was hope, thru failure. Good job.
PBM

ReccaTW responds:

Thanx
Viewers like you are what keep me creating

[The Pinch]

I thought this was pretty funny...

I laughed my ass off at the part where Pinch screamed like a lil ole bitch....lol. Funny stuff...Oh I also like dit when Pinches dick twirled the light saber, oh...and when he was laughing at the other guys lightsaber problems..that shit was funny too.
Good job. I will give you a 5 because I liked your movie and because I can.

halboski responds:

Thanks, You picked up on some of the funny little things I put into it.

[Ron + Murray]

I dont know why...

But i laffed my ass off at this damn thing.
You should def. make more man. Work ont he art a little bit and clean up the audio some. I'm looking forward to seeing the next one.

dagger-happy responds:

GIMME IT! GIMMEEEEE IIIT!!! Thanks for the support and constructive critisism. Expect more episodes in the future...